Revision Plan:

During the revision time I was able to see where my paper could use some touching up. One plan for my revision is to definitely add more of Kelley’s influence into the paper so I can have two scholars plus my own thoughts out on paper. My second plan is to make sure that the flow of the paper will work after I have added the Kelley quotes to the paper. The paper flows well right now I am just nervous to see what will happen when I add one  extra source.

Another part is introducing Kelley in the introduction paragraph like I did with Carr. This would make the introduction to quotes easier because not everyone knows who Kelley even is and if he is even relevant. My paper has errors but with this draft I put a lot of effort into writing the actual draft so there is few mistakes that I am nervous about fixing. Adding an extra scholar and using the tools I have acquired throughout the class should be no problem to do. Grammatical errors real surface level things will be easily corrected once I go over the draft with a “fine tooth comb”